WS01 - The spacey elephant
English, Year 4
- Written response with illustrations
Annotations
1. Creates an engaging first page, with a clear title and an image that captures the imaginative purpose of the text.
2. Opens the text by introducing the main character and an interesting dilemma facing that character. Names the character “Rocket” to symbolise their dream of being an astronaut.
3. Includes an image to support characterisation.
4. Repeats “very large” to emphasise the character’s dilemma.
5. Organises key moments of the storyline in well-structured paragraphs.
6. Uses onomatopoeia (“DING DONG”) to bring the scene to life. Experiments with onomatopoeia (“BLWWBLWWBLWW”) to describe the happy trumpeting.
7. Chooses a precise verb (“strode”) to build Rocket’s personality and attitude.
8. Employs dialogue to develop the storyline.
9. Uses exclamation marks and an illustration to add humour to the text.
10. Contrasts Rocket and the other astronauts and creates humour, because the astronauts fly like birds while Rocket flies like an elephant.
11. Spells multisyllabic words.
12. Concludes the story by repeating the image from the beginning, again capturing the key idea of the text.